The wind, it sighs a gentle tune
A song to make perspective wane
The sun, alight, beside the moon,
Enough to drive the minds insane.
And there they stand. The eternal night,
Seems as brilliant as the day.
With dancing fires, flames unite,
They grow wings and fly away.
Alas, the wind, with time, departs
The wings still flutter, but fail to give.
Silence conquers the throbbing hearts.
The fires, once wild, no longer live.
But the song still echoes; a nostalgic gleam.
A nightmare? No, a dusky dream.
4 comments:
Wow ! great job, i loved the 3rd line in the 3rd stanza "Silence conquers the throbbing hearts." the way you described nature was impressive too (using adjs, similies..personification) " wind...tune, sun...alight beside the moon, eternal night. I liked the last coupltet (A nightmare? No, a dusky dream) two thumbs up my dear ! mwah !
wow! This is a beautiful sonnet, it's full of imagery and it evokes emotion. The elements of nature make it full of mystery. EXCELLENT JOB!
Whoa, that was AMAZING! im sorry, but i really did not know u were so deep.... :P .It's seriously great, i loved how u used the wind and sun in the first stanza,very good imagery. Also, the volta is clearly visible, and it changes the mood, and kindof shows what happens to the wind and fire...And ur couplet!! It was amazing, i absolutely LOVE how it was phrased, and how they rhymed so perfectly, and how u asked a question and answered urself with "no, i dusky dream"...
simply AMAZING. U have truly surprised me, and have made me doubt my own literary ability :(
Again...AMAZING!!! BRAVA!!
i luv your sonnet. its moving and the imagery is powerful. it evokes the senses. the meter and rhyme scheme make it so easy to read. it very interesting to read. but im not sure if your talking about memories which fade away?
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